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Goodnight by ~swimmer92:iconswimmer92:

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You left your fan on
And forgot to put the cap back on your toothpaste
I’m not your maid.
Those eggs you bought are gonna spoil
Because I won’t eat them.
You know I don’t like eggs.
Did you have to park behind me dear?
How am I suppose to leave?
Work was slow today.
I forgive you for skipping our lunch.
I’ll hang your jacket in the closet,
and turn on the game.
I’m making your favorite tonight, steak.
Well I’m headed to bed.
I know your busy, but I miss you.
Goodnight.
©2008-2009 ~swimmer92
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Author's Comments

what do you think?
It's not too sappy right?

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:iconcrazysunshinehikaru:
~CrazySunshineHikaru May 7, 2008, 5:00:02 PM
I don't think it's sappy. I rather like it. Sort of like the typical wife's thoughts every day. ^_^

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I'm superstitious, not religious.
:iconelvenbaby:
~Elvenbaby May 9, 2008, 6:20:47 AM
I agree, sounds very much like a housewife and sad to think about

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"In my dreams he sang to me..."

"I want a relationship I can finally sink my teeth into" ~ Alexander Sterling

"It's not about living forever; it's about living with yourself forever." -Captain Teague
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~swimmer92 May 9, 2008, 5:13:55 PM
yeah but do you get the idea that her love has died? or is it too discreit?

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Love is confusing hope is unreliable and life's a bitch.
Get use to it.
:iconswimmer92:
~swimmer92 May 9, 2008, 5:14:27 PM
Thank you =)

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Love is confusing hope is unreliable and life's a bitch.
Get use to it.
:iconcrazysunshinehikaru:
~CrazySunshineHikaru May 10, 2008, 2:02:31 PM
It isn't too discreet. The speaker sounds tired and a little fed up.

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I'm superstitious, not religious.
:iconswimmer92:
~swimmer92 May 11, 2008, 2:43:57 PM
But not to harsh? is it there just enough?

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Love is confusing hope is unreliable and life's a bitch.
Get use to it.
:iconcrazysunshinehikaru:
~CrazySunshineHikaru May 12, 2008, 3:39:34 PM
It's enough. Harsh didn't come to me at all when I read it.

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I'm superstitious, not religious.
:iconelvenbaby:
~Elvenbaby May 12, 2008, 3:58:05 PM
you're quite welcome

--
"In my dreams he sang to me..."

"I want a relationship I can finally sink my teeth into" ~ Alexander Sterling

"It's not about living forever; it's about living with yourself forever." -Captain Teague
:iconswimmer92:
~swimmer92 May 25, 2008, 1:07:23 PM
Okay thank you =)

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Love is confusing hope is unreliable and life's a bitch.
Get use to it.
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